Tuesday, 11 October 2016

Disconnected - My Draft Narrative.


Every Picture tells a story.


Use your imagination and experience to narrate (tell) a story about the photo.
Where is it? Who is there?
What problem is caused?  How is it solved?


Think about:
  • where your story is set
  • who your characters are - what they do, what they say, and how they think and feel
  • the problem and how it is solved
  • the order of your ideas and how they are linked


Remember to:
  • choose your words carefully
  • take care with your spelling, punctuation, and sentences
  • edit - add or delete words or sentences to improve your work.


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BEGIN WRITING YOUR STORY ON THE NEXT PAGE


Disconnected :
P1 : Luke and Orion plead their parents to let them play in the forest , they say yes after getting sick and tired of hearing please . Heading to the forest they say that they should invite Bayley to come have fun with them . Happily walking down the path went darker and darker they run into the forest hoping to find a small touch of light .


But as the darkest night nothing happened . Luke remembered that legend tells of stalkers that come alive at night in the forest. They were all together but out of nowhere Bayley just vanishes . With Luke frightened to a standstill , Orion had to leave him in order to find Bayley  .  Rushing and Jumping he had wasted no mere second or minute to find Bayley until *wpish* . He uses his own body to stop going further and just manages to come to a stop barely hitting a tree stump.


He stands up trying to siphon out which path bayley was taken or possibly ran into . Being unaware of what would lie out for him he continues to search flipping out his flashlight . He yells and yells until he finds something weird which would Bayley would know about . “ She’s here ” he says to himself . He regains his pace using his athleticism to jump and run all over the place until he finds everything that she had on the path  . “Darnit Bayley ! what are you doing you know there’s stalkers here ” Orion says but meanwhile Bayley finds this forest okay until came to the presence of something never before seen . The Darkhound - King of the Dark Night Forest  .


Bayley asks a whole lot of questions , Saying the last one she had been interrupted by Darkhound saying  “ SILENCE ! IN WHAT OF YOUR KIND’S PRESENCE DO YOU HAVE THE RIGHT TO STAND BEFORE MINE ” . “ I -  “ NO ”! YOU LEAVE NOW AND TAKE YOUR LIFE WITH YOU . “ I’LL NEVER LEAVE  , not until you tell me what you want ” .  Orion listens to the talk as Darkhound prepares to eliminate her - For GOOD! As if a dog Finally got to destroy a cat. Preparing to destroy her Bayley stands in fright but in a mere second Orion just catches her “ WAIT - !!BOOM!! . “ Hm. Pathetic ” .  Ahem , hey  Mr .Cornhead  you sure about that , I think you missed something . Later - * Hut *


Jumping side to side Darkhound merely misses his shot . Then sooner the light shines as it comes to day . With all their parents worried they begin to make calls to them but there’s obviously no reception in the forest so they wouldn’t pick up the calls and Luke comes back to life Telling him to run and they just make it out having to jump for it and somehow Bayley is happier than ever meanwhile Orion collapses staying flat lying on the side of face . “ He’s Out - Cold ” Luke tells her .
“ It took all he had just to get me , I’m sorry Orion ”. He manages to store one more breath for him to wake up  saying  “ Your welcome ” .
Bayley and Luke Drop off Orion  to his parents . “ What happened , Why you little -” . “ Maria  wait - Bayley why are you crying - “ It’s It’s because he saved me from the dark forest ” . “ So my boy risked his own life in order to save you from the dark forest ” . “ Yes sir ”. “ What do you know he actually is learning from us ” . But anyway we’ll rest him on the couch until he wakes up ” Tony says. As Bayley and Luke  depart from the house they pray each other goodnight and a happy day. But Darkhounds fate is yet to be known ...




Monday, 10 October 2016

Explaning My Holiday - LJ

Image result for birthday cake.Image result for RainImage result for Friends House


The Sky rains as if it were trying to cry it was rushing rain for the whole time , I could smell chicken nuggets don’t know whether they were fried, Going to Otara was not one easy drive , I played at my friends house  and one of them was SO DRY.


Speeding cars were  beeping their  horns many times . I Celebrated my two cousins birthday and the Raro was not right . We left at the end it was so great because i finished off the birthday with  slice of cake and ice cream by the side.

I went many places every day , I grew tired of walking , it was so pointless all we did was walking and talking , On saturday I realized school was two days away so I had enjoyed both days ,and I didn’t really wanna come but today yet again it is very fun .



( I am  talking about my cousin’s birthday , going to my friends house ,Going to Otara , and walking to places with my mum.) in one story. A MIXED STORY